I really enjoy this story!!!! I love fantasy type stuff and real like. This has both! Just have to have accountability, because I sometimes get too passionate about my character. And my character Lorena is sort of in a place of healing herself.
I would say we have headed into a chapter two of sorts.
Man, love this story. I think it would be good to think about what the second half entails. I literally play it by ear like this first part, but like to do an outline of sorts to not get too far off track. You are an excellent writer Peter! Very nice rpging with someone again!!! I have missed it. Just don't have too much free time these days. It is probably the best work Ive ever been a part of as far as writing goes. It is easy to get far off track and never finish. Almost reluctant to let anyone in now, lol, but if they ask, at least for me, I just want my writing to become something God can use to inspire others and think upon Him at this time in my life. And being part of this can do that. So yes, it would be a blessing. It would be awesome to breathe life back into the rpg forum again.
I tend to not write very much anymore, but between marriage, children, and dream ministry, my writing has changed a whole lot. Though Canteberry Commons is a town name from Fallout 3.
I was going for a country/small town feel.
I can't remember how old I made Lorena. She was 5 when Peter was 17, so they would be twelve years apart. I have an issue playing romanticism even in a story, so never would feel comfortable going for something like that. But how old is Peter as an adult? 35ish/40 maybe? That would leave Lorena early 20's which was what I was going for.
So if you have ideas for Christmas Eve and Christmas Day, can't wait to hear them!!! Just brainstorming. And if you have any ideas for names, let me know. I just randomize them, but love using symbolism and stuff if you can't tell.
Sooo
Tree fall down for Peter to move again? It will be interesting to see Peter's response to how he knew a blizzard was coming.
1. Conversation with Sherrif Jim- asking for the shelter to be open/ lorena's request for help.
2. Sam seems like a good character to develop. I had that telegraph in my mind where they had to beep in messages when phone service isn't working. Like the town is completely cut off guard making it even more of a Christmas miracle with Peter's supplies.
3. I really like my eagle. Lol. Maybe a surprise visit somehow.
I guess looking at the original Christmas Carol, Scrooge basically became a man of Christmas spirit with much kindness and giving. I just am not sure what Lorena should do, because I don't want to take away from that sweet spirit there we worked to create. Ill be careful. Having fun and this is a very heartwarming story. Would love to copy the finished work all together in my blognif you don't mind. Properly credited of course.
Good morning Mayflower, isn't that sweet of you! I truly feel like I found someone who likes to write an awesome Christian story. I have so many ideas in my head of things to write, other stories. The world writes to entertain and sometimes to instill more worldly values; it's all that it has really. But Christians can write to express their love for God and be a witness to others. I like whatever you do with the characters because part of the story has helped me to express some of my ideas and receive my own type of healing in a pure Christian environment.
Outlines are good and I love the story we have created; I thank you for your kind words, but you really are the gel because you care about the story and the characters. I really don't mind which direction you take the story or if you start to develop a particular character over another. As a writer, I say you should be free to do what you want with no judgment.
I do understand, though, that the story should have 'milestones' and an outline like you said. We should enjoy the process of writing, but we don't want our story to go unfinished either!
The other thing is that I know you are a very busy gal, so I don't ever want you to feel pressured that you have to answer at a certain time period. I *completely* understand and in fact come Jan 18th, I will be taking up my next seminary course in the book of Isaiah at which time I won't be able to be on as often either. On the other hand, sometimes I can't help it when I have a good writing partner because I want to respond and develop the story and get my feelings out on paper. The quick back and forth helps with getting creative energy out on the table; but the long periods of time also helps to think through scenarios and character development and re-read what has been written already.
That's pretty cool on Canteberry Commons, I haven't really done much gaming since Kingdom Hearts 1! lol
Thank you for your candor on playing romance in a story. We don't have to do that then. To be honest, I would really love it if this story can continue it's theme on the pure love of Jesus that is between friends and family and townspeople. Platonic friendship between characters is great with me if you're interested in exploring how platonic friends can show God's love to each other and the world, and I shall make sure not to write into areas we feel uncomfortable with.
Yes, my character can be 40 years old. I seem to remember you sort of made the character around my same age anyway. And so if that makes Lorena early 20's, that's great. I have no clue whether characters with such large age gaps can become best friends or does it wind up in mentor/mentoree elements. But true best friends in Christ aren't exclusive, so there should be lots of interactions with other characters too. Feel free to explore.
I don't have any particular ideas for Christmas Eve and Christmas Day in my head but I can throw out some scenes of what I was thinking. Talks between friends; helping one another and working together. [Also remember, hospitals and sick people are still a reality of life no matter what's going on outside.] I really felt like since it was a mission house and the Pastor might be there and they don't really have anywhere else to be since they are going to be snowed in - I thought a revival service as well. I'd also like to think that Christmas day, while plows are trying to dig the town out, would be many acts of kindness and mercy. Kudos on the symbols, I hope I can pick up on all of them!
Yes to all your ideas below:
// Tree fall down for Peter to move again? It will be interesting to see Peter's response to how he knew a blizzard was coming.//
//- 1. Conversation with Sherrif Jim- asking for the shelter to be open/ lorena's request for help.//
PETER: The only tricky part there is we don't want the "I'm the madly in love boyfriend coming over to ask for your neice's hand in marriage" thing! I'll be sure to write it non-chalantly.
//2. Sam seems like a good character to develop. I had that telegraph in my mind where they had to beep in messages when phone service isn't working. Like the town is completely cut off guard making it even more of a Christmas miracle with Peter's supplies.//
//3. I really like my eagle. Lol. Maybe a surprise visit somehow.//
PETER: The eagle proclaims things; that's why in ancient Christian art, John is sometimes symbolized as an eagle because he is proclaiming his version of the gospel.
//I guess looking at the original Christmas Carol, Scrooge basically became a man of Christmas spirit with much kindness and giving. I just am not sure what Lorena should do, because I don't want to take away from that sweet spirit there we worked to create. Ill be careful. Having fun and this is a very heartwarming story. Would love to copy the finished work all together in my blognif you don't mind. Properly credited of course.
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PETER: My character can still have weaknesses, but with a general different disposition to them. As long as we don't go into romantic boundaries with our characters, you will be fine. If you ever come upon a situation where you think the conversation or scene could get difficult because we are dealing with character's internal hurts, let me know so we can be kind in the process. It has been an honor writing with you. Peter James