Okay. So, I need help with these struggles I keep having about the plots and storylines and thematics I come up or try to deal with in the screenplays I try to write.
I have this story about a KKK member who for reasons out of his hands becomes paralyzed, yet can still, y'know, see and be aware. One of his "klanmates", a "friend" of his, after scheming for a while, rapes the paralyzed man's teen daughter, in front of him. Meanwhile, the older daughter of the paralyzed man, who's a born again christian, takes care of his dad; the raped daughter doesn't say to anyone about it; and the dad, of course, can't neither. The "klanmate" abuses of the paralyzed man's daughter a couple of times more..until the older daughter realizes it. I have only developed it up to there. What do you think? Some ppl told me it's too harsh.
Another one is about Elizabeth, a woman who's gone astray from the Way of God. She's recovering from a divorce. She's lonely and depressed. And there's his son, a Christian with a history of addiction, but has recovered quite well. He's active in the ministry. Next up is Anna (for some reason i keep on picturing Britney Spears playing this woman). She's not a believer. She's made her own life away from her successful parents- not a very good life. She's into drugs, the occassional party, the occassional one-night stand.
So, the stories are supposed to be non-linear, btw. The son breaks up with his fiance, one thing leads to another, he begins a spiral down to drugs again, and even decides to end his life. Elizabeth meets a man, they seem to hit it off, until she learns of his son death- afterwards she just becomes worse than before. And Anna, she meets the son in a gas station- his car broke down on his way to "committ suicide". They meet, like each other, fall in love, and get married too quick. During the heartbreaking honeymoon the son overdoses. Not voluntarily. Anna feels guilty, it overwhelms until she even checks into a rehab clinic.
So times passes, Anna is out. She tries to restart her life...and one night she accidentally runs over a little kid while backing up. She runs over his tiny head. She's in prison where she meets Jesus. Elizabeth learns about Anna, learns she was her son wife and was with him when he died. Elizabeth goes see her, they talk, at the time Anna is already saved. Anna pleads guilty and is sentenced to death. Elizabeth struggles to see past the bad and look at God finally. And then she takes her first step towards seeking God. One step at a time, baby.
So, what do you think? I think is overwrought. The thing is, it seems different when told non-linearly, like it's written.
I'd appreciate any feedback. Thanks.
P.S. The second I don't like very much.
I have this story about a KKK member who for reasons out of his hands becomes paralyzed, yet can still, y'know, see and be aware. One of his "klanmates", a "friend" of his, after scheming for a while, rapes the paralyzed man's teen daughter, in front of him. Meanwhile, the older daughter of the paralyzed man, who's a born again christian, takes care of his dad; the raped daughter doesn't say to anyone about it; and the dad, of course, can't neither. The "klanmate" abuses of the paralyzed man's daughter a couple of times more..until the older daughter realizes it. I have only developed it up to there. What do you think? Some ppl told me it's too harsh.
Another one is about Elizabeth, a woman who's gone astray from the Way of God. She's recovering from a divorce. She's lonely and depressed. And there's his son, a Christian with a history of addiction, but has recovered quite well. He's active in the ministry. Next up is Anna (for some reason i keep on picturing Britney Spears playing this woman). She's not a believer. She's made her own life away from her successful parents- not a very good life. She's into drugs, the occassional party, the occassional one-night stand.
So, the stories are supposed to be non-linear, btw. The son breaks up with his fiance, one thing leads to another, he begins a spiral down to drugs again, and even decides to end his life. Elizabeth meets a man, they seem to hit it off, until she learns of his son death- afterwards she just becomes worse than before. And Anna, she meets the son in a gas station- his car broke down on his way to "committ suicide". They meet, like each other, fall in love, and get married too quick. During the heartbreaking honeymoon the son overdoses. Not voluntarily. Anna feels guilty, it overwhelms until she even checks into a rehab clinic.
So times passes, Anna is out. She tries to restart her life...and one night she accidentally runs over a little kid while backing up. She runs over his tiny head. She's in prison where she meets Jesus. Elizabeth learns about Anna, learns she was her son wife and was with him when he died. Elizabeth goes see her, they talk, at the time Anna is already saved. Anna pleads guilty and is sentenced to death. Elizabeth struggles to see past the bad and look at God finally. And then she takes her first step towards seeking God. One step at a time, baby.
So, what do you think? I think is overwrought. The thing is, it seems different when told non-linearly, like it's written.
I'd appreciate any feedback. Thanks.
P.S. The second I don't like very much.
