Left Behind.

[Jordyn]

Hey everyone, I was reading Left Behind today (First book, pretty good!) and it inspired me to write a poem about a person, being Left Behind, and then finding hope for the second coming of Jesus is near.

So here we go, comment please

And I said to you, where have you been?
I've missed you so much
Because when I was alone,
There was never an us

And I cried out for you,
But you never came
I held onto my hope,
But my feelings never changed

I was about to give up on myself,
Just when I found you,
Sitting around the corner,
Hidden from my view

“I say, I say, my dear
Where have you been?”
He said “I've been here all along
The question is where you went.”

And my eyes filled up with tears,
As I fell to my knees
“I’ve been in a far away land
Take me back,” I pleaded

He stared at me silently,
And waited for my sobbing to stop
“My child,” He said, “you are one of a kind,
How could I not give you another chance?”

I began to cry again out of His kindness
I shook uncontrollably and He held me in his arms
He comforted me, while I laid there,
He healed my broken heart

I shuddered and closed my eyes
The tears stopped and the words ceased,
I no longer could see His face,
But I knew His grip on me had not yet been released

I tried to feel His arms,
Wrapped around me with such certainty,
Surprisingly, I could
And I danced around with glee

I told myself, and believed,
That there wasn’t a single hope anywhere
That He would never come back for me,
And I would never be prepared

But alas, my feelings have changed!
And I know now that I am with Him
For He holds me every night while I sleep
And He forgives me of my sin

Oh Lord, I have a prayer tonight
A request for you to hear
I cannot believe these seven years are up!
Finally, I cheer!

But I look around and see disaster,
Nobody seems to know of this
They seem to all have turned away from,
The fact that you exist

So I ask you now to heal them,
To forgive them and let them know
That you are with them and they are safe
And that you love them so

Tell them they have another chance,
To come along with you and the others,
So we can all be free of sin forever,
Up where we belong in Heaven.

Amen.


Yes?
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Okie. Just opinions? Corrections?
Anything, let me know how you like it (or dislike it)
Byee.

 

[LoveFaith]

I do like it!!! Awesome job.

The only thing I may find a bit confusing is how the character starts crying when God asks "Where have you been?", then you never clearly imply that the crying stops, but then later say "I started crying again". It would be easier to grasp if you took out the second time that the person starts crying.

Overall, it was great!

 

[jasmine_childoftheking]

This is interesting poem about someone whose been left behind.

I’ve actually thought about writing a series of Left Behind fanfics.. new characters addition, some more with Global Community Middle School, maybe set it during our day (which of course, it can be set at any time). Also, what if Alaska was annexed from the USA, and became part of the United Russian States, much like Hawaii became part of the United Pacific States in the series?

Should I go for it?